Posts made by shadow654204

Uta walks of the bus 2 blocks from his house." What a long day." "What time is it?" "Is that right?' "6:00 p.m.! It's that late" "I have to get home if I want to have dinner before I have to go to bed for school and work I start work at 4:00 after school dang." As Uta walks up to his door he sees a package addressed to him "what's this I am not expecting anything?" "Oh well let's check it out" Uta walks into his 2 bedroom 1 bath apartment and sets the package on the counter by the knives gabs a knife as he cut the box open he cuts his wrist too "OUCH!" as he yells in pain and drops the knife on the floor he runs to the sink to wash off the blood and opens the first aid kit and take the rubbing alcohol "I remember when my parents were still alive mom would always put rubbing alcohol on any cut so it would not become infected" "I never did like to put the alcohol on a cut always burned now where is the Neosporin there it is." as he rubs the Neosporin on the cut pulls out a bandage and places it on the cut "Rule number 1 when living on your own have a first aid kit in every room if you can." "Now what is in that box?" As Uta reaches in the box he pulls out a envelope with a full drops of his blood from when he cut himself as he opens the envelope and pulls out a letter the letter read.
Dear Uta,
I am a very good friend of your dad I even helped him out on a project he was making just for you before his untimely death I am terribly sorry if I brought up some memories but he told me if anything happens to him to give you this even though I helped on it I do not know what it is so if I may ask a favor from you if you are able to figure out what it is please look me up I would like to know what it is well I guess this is where I will end the letter good bye
Signed
DR. Paladin

Well let see what this is as Uta reaches in again pulls out a black faced and red trimming pet Uta looks at in confusion "What is this?" "It looks like one of those pets everyone has." As Uta turns on the pet he flips the pet over and sees a demonic looking Navi "who dare wake me from my slumber Dr.Waado is that you?" Wait you're not Dr.Waado who are you?" "I'm his son Uta I guess you're my Navi."
"Hmm I don't believe you now where is Dr.Waado?" "umm he's *sniff* dead along with my mother." "there is no way Waado can be dead." Well if that's the case I have no owner, And no you're not my owner!""who was supposed to be your owner then?" "He said it was supposed to be someone by the name Uta." "That's me my name is Uta so I am your owner." "Prove it show me you can help me fight viruses." If you can do well I will believe your story now put me in the network." "who do I do that?" Uta rubs the back of his head."Are you kidding!?!" "you don't know how to jack in to the network." "ok do you have a computer with a u.s.b port?""yes I do." "is that how I jack into the network?" "yes very good our not that dumb after all."As Uta walks to his pc to jack in the mysterious Navi he asks "what is your name?" "he called me Zetsubou so please call me that and nothing else."

ok i am posting the death a as new post here cause i made alot of changes so here it is please tell me if you like it or not


AS me and ledge climb to the top of mount death. I notice that the emperor of darkness was here but I was too late have left no trace of him being here. In the corner of my eye I notice someone trying to leave this place. I rush over to him cutting off his path I slam him to the ground so I could ask a few questions "where is the Emperor of darkness?" "I..I don't know where he is much less who he is." "Liar!" "I know that you know where he is." "What makes you think that?" "I saw you looking through the rubble." "well sorry to burst your bubble I don't know where he is." Don't make me kill you I swear I will kill you." "hahahahah well I guess you will have to kill me now because I have no clue where that person is." he refuses to tell me what I want to know. I concentrate my powers of shadow around his lungs. Tainting them as I go down further passing his heart, tainting every organ in his body. Then going back to the heart tainting the heart as well. I asked one last time where the Emperor of Darkness is he does not say. He tries to breath in caving his skin inside his throat then turning his whole body inside out. Turning him into nothing but shadows at last he dies after vanishing into the shadows themselves. As I walk off I say to ledge he could of lived if he told me where the Emperor of darkness was.

i am ok with constructive critisisim like any thing to add but it's the comments talking about the spelling the puncuation and grammer that gets on my nerves

ok well thaks for clearling every thing up and um the reason that it is boreing to read is because you do not know what has led up to the killing of a inocent hav you have no idea of the shadows past and what he does and the reason for not puting up what lead to the killing is because i had no idea what was goin to lead to the death when i put it up here i only knew the way the death was going to happen and aftewr i get what i have been working on for the rp i will try to work on the death a little more.

ok i was ok with opionins up intill they kept saying the same thing after i told you all i don't know how many times that it was a rough draft of what it would look like ok now i will just start a new question is it original or cleshay?

ok you know what? I am sick of reading the crap your telling me if you don't like it just say so

how many time do i have to say this it is a death in my book it show the death of course there is not dialog the vic cant talk much less breath and shadow the main person cant talk because he is concentraiting his bowers and if he brake the consentration he loses his attack

Like i said befor it is the rough draft of that death, but what i want to know is what does every one think, Of the death is it brutal or not is it cold hearted or not.

it's a death in my book ok i just wanted to know what every one thinks

now what do you mean by that?

what do you think is inpossible it is a fantasy book

ok i quees i need to tell every one shadow the main charchter is heartless has no feeeling when comes to gathering infomation where does it say he crushes the guys throut the trout caves in shadow does not lay a hand on the guy

ok i never heard twi so please explain that and if you did what i said what was the outcome could you talk?

well first let me thank you for what you have said and second part of what you said was flawed ok answer me this after shadow tainted the guys organs and asks where the master of darkness is the guy trys to breath to give a answer his skin caves in his throut and turns his whole body inside out how can the guy talk,screem etc you go to a mirror breath in intill you skinn makes a dint in your neck hold it and try to talk and i will still work on it i maight make 3 versons of it

please tell me what do all of you think about my death in my book

thank you darkstar1006 and don't for get about Punctuation
i do all of that in the final draft

well for your info thats just the rough draft i have not worked out all the bugs

tell me what you think of this as a death for my book cronicels of shadow the new begining and no my shadow is not the shadow from the sonic games


He refuses to tell me what i want to know. I concentrait my powers of shadow around his lungs.Tainting them as i go down further passing his heart tainting every orgon in his body. Then going back to the heart tainting the heart as well. I asked one last time where the Master of Darkness is he does not say. He trys to breath incaveing his skin inside his throut then turning his whole body inside out. Turning him into shadows at last he dies after vanishing into the shadows themselvs.

NetNavi
Name:Zetsubou
Gender: male
Element: fire
Type: sword
Appearance: large black body, blood red claws, large black wings, blood red edges long tail black on to blood red bottom, musculer, blood red horns, bloody teeth, human shape
Personality: seeks no acception, lusts for power, does not care what other navies think, shunned out of society for the way he looks and how he acts
Custom Weapon: claws
Signature Attack: tail swipe: large swipe at the enemy with tail dealing 60 damage

Operator
Name:Uta
Age: 17
Gender: male
Appearance: black hair down to his shoulders, black eye liner,noticable scar down his left arm ,large black cloak, black nail polish on his figure nails, 5"8 height, weight 100 pounds, red eyes, white skin, black jeans, black t shirt large black boots wears satanic rings and necklaces .
Personality: loner due to the death of his parents after seeing them be shot in front of him no one did anything to help, does not care what others think of him, seeks no acceptation could not care less about what happens to him or anyone else doesn't think highly of his self lives on his own .
PET Modifications: classic pet black face and red trim